LO5 - Reflection on feedback.

1. Have needs/ expectations been met for the client brief and target audience?

For this unit I have been tasked with creating a script for an episode for Yorkshire Lasses which will be aired on Sheffield Live. The target audience for Yorkshire Lasses are mainly female that are between the age of 16 - 25 with the social grades of the intended target audience being ABC1C2. The script for the latest episode relates to the target audience as it features a number of things that are similar to the target audience. The characters are in the ages of 18 - 24 and they come from a range of backgrounds, Frankie Cheryl and Liam are all upper class and would be considered to be in the AB category. They come from wealthy backgrounds and get allowances from their parents. Stacy Amy Carl and Jeremy are all middle lower class and would be considered to be BC1C2, after all of the bills are paid they have enough deposable income for a comfortable life but not enough to be considered well off. Jimmy and Ryan are lower / working class and would be considered to be in the DE class. Ryan lives on his own and works part time, once all of his bills are paid he has little disposable income and Jimmy relies on the welfare state for his income.
Another way in which the script relates to the target audience is that a lot of the problems that arise in the episode are problems that the majority of the population face, therefore the audience would understand what it happening and why the characters behave in the way that they do.


What were the clients likes and dislikes?

After speaking with The Writers Group one of the things that could be improved is the ending of the script. In my opinion this was the weakest area of my script. They had said that it should end on a cliffhanger involving Carl, Jeremy and Cheryl. It was suggested that Carl and Cheryl should be quite intimate before Jeremy sees them together, they could be embracing or leaning in for a kiss and at that moment to camera would cut to Jeremy who has just spotted them, the scene would end as soon as they have spotted each other. This is important because since Yorkshire Lasses is a drama it would need to follow the conventions of a TV drama. One of the other things that was mentioned in the meeting was that I could add some background sounds to some of the scenes like the ones at Meadowhall and at Weatherspoons, these locations are quite noisy with them attracting a mass amount of people all day. So as the characters are talking this would be in the background just loud enough to be noticed.
The of the things that The Writers Group did like was how the narrative developed, you could see how the tension was raising between the characters before they had all met.
When they eventually did meet

What are the relevant changes that need to made to the script?

So then main aspects of the script that I need to change are:

• Adding diegetic sounds where needed
• Ending the script on a cliffhanger 
• Add some ambient music   

The are three scenes in the scripts that need the diegetic sound which are ones at Meadowhall, Weatherspoons and the party at Cheryl's house, since they are the locations with the most background noise. With the cliffhanger, I am going to have Carl and Cheryl kiss and at that moment Jeremy runs round the corner to find them embracing each other. The ambient music will be played between the scenes, this would be used to help show progression between the scenes. These changes are important because these are part of the conventions of a TV drama, adding these to the script allow Yorkshire Lasses to fulfil its purpose as a drama.


Is the content of the product correct?

Based on all the example scripts that I have looked at the I would say that the Yorkshire Lasses script meets the needs of a TV show script. The language of the script is informal and it's because of the characters' background and their environment. The characters are young and younger people don't really approach other people in a formal way and also, all of the character know each other so when they are speaking to each other it is in a relaxed manner. The house style of the script follows the conventions of a TV show, it is written in courier font at size 12. The location information is justified to the left of my script, the characters' speech is in the middle of the script with names in capitals and the shot types, camera angles editing techniques are justified to the right of my script. One of the other features of the script is the intro and outro all TV shows (Soaps) have their own theme music like Eastenders that is played at the beginning and the end of the show.

The script covers more than one type of mode of address, it depends on the type of conversation the characters are having. In scene one where Cheryl is talking to Jeremy the mode of address would be Parent to Child, the language in the script is informal since there is a relationship between the two. Cheryl is the dominant person between the two as she is angry at Jeremy as he doesn't agree with her, in this instance Jeremy seen as defensive making him the smaller person. However in the third scene at Weatherspoons the mode of address between the guys is peer to peer, everyone is the scene is equal as they are just having a regular conversation with each other and because of this the language is informal.

To be able to film this episode I would need to add more shooting script conventions to it for it to be successful. I could add more to the location information so you have a better understanding of what the area should look like. I would also need to add in some sound effects, this is because normally the camera may not be able to pick up the sound that you are create to give it its desired affect.

Does it meet legal and ethical requirements?

With regards to the legal and ethical side my script would need to abide by the rules and regulations of Ofcom. One of their broadcasting codes that applies to me is Section One Protecting under 18's. It states that material that might seriously impair the mental or moral development of people under eighteen must not be broadcast. Also, children must be protected from content that isn't suitable for them by appropriate scheduling. Some of the content in my script would be deemed unsuitable for young children so, if this was to be broadcast on TV it would have to be after the watershed which is after 9PM. I also intend to have this available on the internet, to try and protect the under eighteens I would have a page pop up where the user would have to prove their age in order to watch the episode. 

One of the things that I would need to do is to gain permissions for some of the materials that I want to use for Yorkshire Lasses, the music used at the intro and the outro is what I need the permission for. Gaining permissions for materials is important because there are property laws that protect creative works like music, using such materials without permission would be violating the owners rights which would subject you to legal action. You would be forced to pay money damages to the copyright owner and be forced to stop using the work. However, if the work has fallen into the public domain then I would not need permission to use it as it is qualified for fair use. If the use of the material qaulifies as fair use then it would not be considered an illegal infringement.

LO4 - Client Feedback.

I had asked five questions to the Writers Group about the content on my script, this is the email.

This is the interview between me and one of the representatives from the Writers Group.

LO3 - First draft and feedback.

This is the feedback that I had received on my script regarding the structure of the script and any spelling mistakes in the script.

LO3: Production plan.

This is for the week beginning on 17th October.

LO2 - Audience profile.

The target audience for the TV programme will be 70% female and 30% male who are in-between the age of 16-25. This is because of the content of the show is deemed to be more feminine therefore, meaning that the intended target audience can relate to the characters. The NRS social grade for the target audience would be ABC1C2. This is because the show the show will showcase people from many different backgrounds which would allow the show to appeal to a wider range of people. Also, for a long time Sheffield was deemed to be a very working class city, so the show to be realistic it has to include characters that fit this profile.

LO2 - Moodboard

These are mood boards for each characters and what they should look like.

LO2: Back up ideas.

THE BRIEF
For this task we will be making a film trailer in the style of Warp.

TARGET AUDIENCE
18+, this is due to all the violence and murder and would not be appropriate for a younger audience. This will be aimed at a male audience due to all the violence. The film will also be aimed at the ABC1 category.


SEGMENT SYNOPSIS AND HOW IT RELATES TO THE BRIEF
4 students are in the college after hours, while the basement shutters are up they go down there to see what its like and accidentally get locked in there. As they know they are going to be stuck in there for the night they continue to film until the morning to pretend to be like other films that document their experience. As they look at some funny footage they recorded, they replay it and see a mysterious figure in the distance. As they go in the same direction of where the figure was they enter the room and the door shuts mysteriously without any of the known characters doing it. knowing something strange is going on they look around the basement to try and get some answers.

KEY MILESTONES
Planning (Find location, find the cast etc.)
Get equipment/ props
Arrange meet ups (Inc. times, dates etc.)
Film
Edit
Add non-diegetic sounds


EQUIPMENT
Camera
Boom mic
Dolly
Lights
Tripod


PROPS AND MODELS
Camera
Phone
Torch

HEALTH AND SAFETY CONSIDERATIONS
Make sure not to leave camera bags on the floor in case someone trips.
Make sure that the equipment does not overheat/ get wet.
Make sure that actors are wearing suitable footwear.
Must be careful when crossing roads/ over tram tracks etc.


LEGAL AND ETHICAL CONSIDERATIONS
The BBFC is a non governmental organisation which is funded by the film industry, there job is to regulate any of the films within the UK. According to the BBFC's guidelines the film trailer that we will be making would have the age rating 15, this is because the will some cases of strong violence and some foul language. Therefore this trailer will be shown after the watershed (9pm) because the unsuitable material listed earlier cannot be shown before this time as children may be watching television. It is important that we follow the guidelines that the BBFC have put in place, this is because they are put there for the benefit of the public. So violating any of these rules would compromise the protection of the public from things they should not see.

For our productions the guidelines that we need to follow are:
Violence - May be strong but should not dwell on the infliction of pain or injury. Programmes must not include material (whether in individual programmes or in programmes taken together) which, taking into account the context, condones or glamorises violent, dangerous or seriously antisocial behaviour and is likely to encourage others to copy such behaviour.

Methods of suicide and self-harm must not be included in programmes except where they are editorially justified and are also justified by the context.
Language - There may be strong language. Very strong language may be permitted depending on the manner in which it is used.

According to Ofcom who regulate broadcasting on TV, for our production these are the rules we must follow (Material that might seriously impair the physical, mental or moral development of people under eighteen must not be broadcast). We must not show swearing, graphic violence, explicit sex scenes or alcohol and drugs before the watershed. (The watershed is at 9pm; ). Due to this our trailer will therefore be shown post watershed, as according to the BBFC the film certificate for our film will be an 15 as we include slight violence.

DISTRIBUTION

This trailer would most likely to access able on YOUTUBE and the website of the film company WARP FILMS. Youtube has something for everyone so any sort of trailer would appear on youtube for the people to view it. It would appear on the website on warp films because the contents of the trailer is very similar to the types films that they make, like their films our film trailer is targeted towards a niche audience. This would also be available in showroom cinemas, although these cinemas show a range of big hollywood films there are also known for showing a lot of indie films. Our film trailer is more of an indie product so it would be suitable for showroom cinemas. It can also be shown in regular cinemas, this would widen the audience for our product.

THE FOLLOWING, WILDFIRE PRODUCTIONS.


THE BRIEF
For this task, we are making a film trailer in the style of warp.


TARGET AUDIENCE
15+, females because the narrative is based on females, and the female audience will be routing for her to escape; 15+ due to the fact that it isn't too violent or sexualized

SEGMENT SYNOPSIS AND HOW IT RELATES TO THE BRIEF
Shane is in love with Emily, however she is already in a relationship with Sam. Shane kills off Sam in a jealous rage, but keeps the fact that it was he from Emily; he begins to comfort her during her loss. As the pieces begin to fit together she realises that Shane kills Sam and attempts to escape but Shane catches her and keeps her captive in his basement that leads to Emily's sister (Rebecca) trying to rescue her. (Characters: 2 girls, 2 boys). This links to the brief as we have been asked to make a film trailer.

KEY MILESTONES
Planning (Find location, find the cast etc.)
Get equipment/ props
Arrange meet ups (Inc. times, dates etc.)
Film
Edit
Add non-diegetic sounds

KEY DATES
27th October  pre-production planning
10th November - 12th December: filming
19th December onwards: editing
30th March - Final Submission
13th April - Launch date



EQUIPMENT
Camera
Boom mic
Dolly
Lights
Tripod


PROPS AND MODELS
Rope
Gun
Bullets
Keys
Phone

HEALTH AND SAFETY CONSIDERATIONS
Be careful when running on stairs, and also be careful on slippery floors if wet, and watch out for doors.
Make sure not to leave camera bags on the floor in case someone trips.
Make sure that the equipment does not overheat/ get wet.
Make sure that actors are wearing suitable footwear.
Must be careful when crossing roads/ over tram tracks etc.
For each location that we film in as part of this production we will complete a Recce form and a Risk assessment.

LEGAL AND ETHICAL CONSIDERATIONS
The BBFC is a non governmental organisation which is funded by the film industry, there job is to regulate any of the films within the UK. According to the BBFC's guidelines the film trailer that we will be making would have the age rating 15, this is because the will some cases of strong violence and some foul language. Therefore this trailer will be shown after the watershed (9pm) because the unsuitable material listed earlier cannot be shown before this time as children may be watching television. It is important that we follow the guidelines that the BBFC have put in place, this is because they are put there for the benefit of the public. So violating any of these rules would compromise the protection of the public from things they should not see.

For our productions the guidelines that we need to follow are:
Violence - May be strong but should not dwell on the infliction of pain or injury. Programmes must not include material (whether in individual programmes or in programmes taken together) which, taking into account the context, condones or glamorises violent, dangerous or seriously antisocial behaviour and is likely to encourage others to copy such behaviour.

Methods of suicide and self-harm must not be included in programmes except where they are editorially justified and are also justified by the context.
Language - There may be strong language. Very strong language may be permitted depending on the manner in which it is used.

According to Ofcom who regulate broadcasting on TV, for our production these are the rules we must follow (Material that might seriously impair the physical, mental or moral development of people under eighteen must not be broadcast). We must not show swearing, graphic violence, explicit sex scenes or alcohol and drugs before the watershed. (The watershed is at 9pm; ). Due to this our trailer will therefore be shown post watershed, as according to the BBFC the film certificate for our film will be an 15 as we include slight violence.

DISTRIBUTION
This trailer would most likely to access able on YouTube and the website of the film company WARP FILMS. YouTube has something for everyone so any sort of trailer would appear on YouTube for the people to view it. It would appear on the website on warp films because the contents of the trailer is very similar to the types films that they make, like their films our film trailer is targeted towards a niche audience. This would also be available in showroom cinemas, although these cinemas show a range of big hollywood films there are also known for showing a lot of indie films. Our film trailer is more of an indie product so it would be suitable for showroom cinemas. It can also be shown in regular cinemas, this would widen the audience for our product.

LO2 - Treatment.

YORKSHIRE LASSES

YLtv Production- broadcasted March 28th

THE BRIEF

We have been set the task of producing an online web series. We are going to produce Yorkshire Lasses which is a young adult drama focusing on four main teenage girls and the various aspects of their life.

TARGET AUDIENCE

The target audience for this soap opera will be mainly of a female gender, between the ages of 16 and 25. This is due to the main characters of the show being of this gender and age, therefore meaning that they will be relatable and have similar issues to the viewers. The NRS social grade of the target audience will be ABC1C2; this is because the topics and genre of the show can appeal to a large range of people, but with more of a focus on the lower middle class due to the accents, location and issues raised etc. The show will also be open to attract a variety of ethnicities.

SEGMENT SYNOPSIS AND HOW IT RELATES TO THE BRIEF

The first episode begins at Cheryl's house where she is getting ready to host a party, she plans to have all of her friends there but it is pointed out by Jeremy that it would be a good idea. This is because it includes her ex who is Jeremy's brother and Amy, who is known to have a slight drinking problem but it pregnant. This episode will you what happens when all the problems come face to face. This links to the brief as it has plenty of drama included in it and focuses on the lives of the main characters.

KEY MILESTONES

• All location scouting and casting finished by January 22^nd
• All paperwork finished by the end of January
• Filming starts January 27^th
• All filming completed by February 20^th
• All editing finished by March 11^th
• Broadcast date will be March 28^th

EQUIPMENT

• 4K Sony Camera for filming
• Tripod
• Possible lights
• Boom mic
• Recording studio
• Mac with Adobe Premiere for editing

PROPS AND MODELS

• Models:(1^st episode actors/actresses)
• Four main girl models for Cheryl, Amy, Frankie and Stacy
• Main boys will be Jeremy, Carl and Ryan
• Smaller parts: nail technician(s)
• Props:
• Acrylic nail products (included in the nail bar)
• Kettle, mug of tea

HEALTH AND SAFETY CONSIDERATIONS
We need to ensure that all the locations we are going to use are risk assessed so that there are no health and safety problems. Two of the locations we are using will be houses of a number of team members; therefore we know they are safe.

We will do recce sheets and risk assessments for each of the locations to ensure that no harm can be caused to any of the team members, including the actors. We also needs to ensure that the equipment being used in each location will be safe and at no chance of damage.

LEGAL AND ETHICAL CONSIDERATIONS
Within the TV episode we will make sure that no offence is caused to anyone of any race, gender, ethnicity or sexuality. We will use language that is suitable for all genders, ethnicities, sexualities and race, therefore causing no reason for any legal or ethical issues included in the show.

Any music used in the show will be copyrighted or able to use without any copyright issues. We will be using the website audionetwork.lgfl.org.uk for the theme music and some other music included in the TV show as it is a website that allows you to use the music on it for free.

Finally we will need consent forms for everyone that will star in the show so that they agree to our terms and conditions, therefore preventing any legal and ethical issues when it comes to the consent of the actors/actresses. We will also need consent forms for certain locations, for example the nail bar; we will need a consent form from whoever is in charge of the business.

Script:

1. int. nail bar. day.

CHERYL, AMY, FRANKIE and STACY are all sat in the nail bar having their nails done.

NAIL TECHNICIAN

So what colours are you wanting?

AMY

Just the usual (pause) so how’s you and Carl then?

CHERYL

(Sighs) Don’t even get me started.

FRANKIE

What’s up now?

CHERYL

Well...

(whoosh SFX)

2. Int. bedroom. night

CHERYL walks into her room to see CARL on her bed. Footsteps SFX.

CHERYL

Oh Carl, you’re a good lad but I need a man.

CARL

No please, I can change Cheryl, you’re the only lass I want to be with.

CHERYL

Carl, please, just go (pause) make another girl happy.

CARL

Is there someone else?

CHERYL

No Carl, it’s not like that don’t be stup-

CARL

No Cheryl I think it’s exactly like that.

Jeremy comes in the house the nose is heard from upstairs.

CARL

That’s him isn’t it?

CHERYL

No Carl, there’s no need for this

CARL

Give me one good reason not to break his face

CHERYL

He’s your brother

   (whoosh SFX)

3. int. nail bar. day.

Scene retuns to nail bar

frankie/amy/stacy

gASP

CHERYL

What?

STACY

You can’t get with a lads brother

CHERYL

I have ma reasons, anyway

                                               (WHOOSH SFX)

Cuts back to the bedroom.

JEREMY

Babe you up here?

CHERYL

Yeah just a sec (she whispers) I’m so sorry

CARL

Oh Cheryl you really are a whore!

                                             (Slapping SFX)

JEREMY

Babe you ok?

CHERYL

(WIMPERS) Yeah I’m alright

CARL

I think there’s something you need to see Jeremy

JEREMY

(Whispers) I know that voice.

                                             (WHOOSH SFX)

Back at the nail bar. 

FRANKIE

Oh Cheryl you do get yourself in shit sometimes

CHERYL

I can’t help that all the boys want me

AMY/STACY

(Imitating Cheryl’s voice) I can’t help that all the boys want me

FRANKIE

So what happened?

CHERYL

They both walked out on me.

                                                (WOOSH SFX)

Cuts back to the bedroom. 

CARL

How long has this been going on?

JEREMY

She said she was single

CARL

Well obviously not!

JEREMY

Just stay calm

CARL

My brother is getting with my bird, how do you expect me to stay calm?

JEREMY

I dunno, but let’s just settle this like adults.

CARL

Oh shut up moral high ground.

JEREMY

I just think.

CARL

I’m sick of you just thinking, with your qualifications and you thinking you’re better than me.

JEREMY

It’s obvious that you’re upset

CARL

You say one more word and I’ll nut yah.

CHERYL

Carl please stop.

CARL

You have no right to speak.

JEREMY

There’s no need to be rude

CARL

Right that’s it!

                                          (Fighting noises)

     Back at the nail bar. 

CHERYL

Yeah so that’s what happened.

AMY

Don’t worry you’ll get another one in no time.

FRANKIE

Like you said all the guys want you

(All the girls laugh)

STACY

How about we go on a girlie night out?

FRANKIE

Oh my god yes!

CHERLY

Yeah pull all the lads!

AMY

Moving on a bit fast there Cheryl.

CHERYL

             Well you can hardly talk.

                            AMY

                     What you on about?

                           CHERYL

   Last time I heard, you slept with 3 guys in a week.

  

                             (FRANKIE, AMY and STACY LAUGH)

                           AMY

         OI it was only one guy…(pause) I just slept             with him 3 times.     

                          STACY

          So what’s going on with you and ‘im then?

                

                          AMY

                      Well…

                                               (WHOOSH SFX)

4. int. AMY’S HOUSE. NIGHT.

AMY and RYAN are sat in AMY’s bedroom.

AMY

Are you staying over, or going home later? I need to talk to you about something

RYAN

Well I’ve got my work clothes, (flirty tone) thought I could stay the night.

AMY

Right just so we’re clear (pause) this is not a relationship. But…

RYAN

Yeah, I know. I’ve actually been seeing someone else

AMY

Oh, who is she? (Pause) Actually I think you should leave

RYAN

But Amy this is what you wanted.

AMY

Don’t you tell me what I wanted! It’s complicated

RYAN

It’s been complicated for three months

AMY

Just trust me Ryan. You don’t understand

RYAN

Well then make me understand. Tell me what you want

(Silence) That’s what I thought

AMY

Ryan please

RYAN

No I’m sick of this, go find another fool

AMY

Ryan I’m…

RYAN

Spit it out then

AMY

Pregnant, I’m fucking pregnant (pause) and it’s yours if that wasn’t obvious.

(Big pause)

RYAN

Oh Amy

                                                (WOOSH SFX)

Back to nail bar.

FRANKIE

Amy you being serious

STACY

Are you sure?

AMY

I checked 3 times (starts to cry)

CHERYL

You going to keep it?

STACY

Amy, it has fingernails. Think about the colors it could have.

AMY

This is not the time to quote juno

FRANKIE

But it’s a reyt film. (Slowly hearing Amy crying)

CHERYL

Guys this is really not the time.

AMY

I guess I’ll just have to keep it.

STACY

But what about Ryan?

                                                (WOOSH SFX)

At Amy’s house. 

RYAN

How long have you known?

AMY

I really don’t want to talk about it.

RYAN

Amy just tell me, don’t fuck about.

AMY

5 week’s

RYAN

I thought we used protection (Amy burst in to tears)

AMY

I dunno, it just happened.

RYAN

What are you going to do with it? (Silence) You know I’ll support you with whatever decision you make. (Further silence) you know that right? (More silence Amy sniffles) Amy please just say something.

AMY

Thank you

RYAN

So are you going to keep it?

AMY

I don’t know.

RYAN

Well it’s your decision.

AMY

Don’t put all the responsibility on me.

RYAN

It’s your fault that this has happened anyway.

AMY

How dare you. I didn’t force you.

RYAN

Whatever.

AMY

See we can’t even get our dysfunctional relationship to work, how do expect us to raise a child. It’ not like those stupid video games that you play. This is real life.

RYAN

Well I never asked for this.

                                                (WOOSH SFX)

         Back to nail bar.

        

CHERYL

How dare he say that?

AMY

I know, it’s fucked up.

FRANKIE

You can’t stay with him

AMY

But I think I love him.

Tune in next time to see if Amy keeps the baby.

 Set designs:

Budget:

Recce:

H) Risk Assessment:

I) Legal and ethical issues:
The content within Yorkshire lasses doesn't really cause a problem with regards to the Ofcom rules and regulations, there is no excessive foul language and it does not display or glamourise excessive violence. This production would fall under Section one: Protecting under eighteens, the principle of this is to ensure that people who are under eighteen are protected. One of the things that we would need to consider is the scheduling time, if the content in Yorkshire lasses is not appropriate for children then it will have to shown after the watershed. The watershed starts at 9pm and this is where any material that is unsuitable for children can be broadcasted on TV. However the relatively mild nature of Yorkshire lasses means that it can be played before the watershed. In one of the scenes in Yorkshire lasses it will show the use of alcohol, since Yorkshire lasses is targeted towards people who are in the age range of 16 - 25 the use of alcohol is permitted in some of the scenes.